You know I am not one for falling
But if I happen to one day topple or tumble
You must catch me, despite their forestalling
Yes, it is clear they want us to crumble
Soon our veins will merge and our bodies will fuse
And we will be a welded miscreation
A monument for those forbidden to choose
An immaculate paragon of devastation
They will slice these ties with a jagged knife and lance
Against the will of us buckled symbiotic wrecks
This is no accident, no random product of chance
No mere fender-bender, but far more complex
I pray they think twice before every incision
It is criminal to sever knots designed by celestial collision
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David is scared...
No but in all seriousnessness its very nice especially
"It is criminal to sever knots designed by celestial collision"
You should really hand it in with your other writing to the writing award because they will see that you are great at all kinds of writing. Smalla! anjad!
i go eat
I like your title, Danny. Mine sounds far too pedantic in comparison to 'Celestial Collision'.
Very nice Danny, I'll skip the "respected sonnet structure" blabber and go straight to the point. Though I'm far from certain, I interpreted your sonnet as the creation of a being in a woman's womb, seimese twins perhaps? How they become one, "a welded miscreation", but that once born they must be seperated slicing the "ties with a jagged knife" "against" their "will". And that they should not be seperated, and The Beatles said it best, once again: Let it be. O let it be. wisper words of wisdom,let it beeeeee
i've commented on almost everyone's sonnet and im just too tired now! i'm going straight to the point ! your sonnet is full with rich vocab :) i loved this part " Soon our veins will merge and our bodies will fuse
And we will be a welded miscreation" and the first stanza! Good work danny k ! :)
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